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The Bene Gesserit Litany Against Fear. From "Dune", by Frank Herbert.

translation by Jordan DeLong on Jun 12 2002.

redone on Nov 28 2002 (old version at the bottom)


This is a bit less of a less literal translation, better gadri

usage, etc. -jrd

_I modify this version to be successfuly parsed by jboski. Other than "gau" I

didn't change the meaning. -guerrier-cachalot(or la

brabenvaxda'o balsoi, dunno why it can't be translated)_

.eisai mi to'e terpa .i lonu terpa cu menli catra .i lonu terpa cu cmalu nunmrobi'o gi'e jai gau se jalge lo mulno za'i daspo .i .ai lanli ronu mi terpa .i .ai curmi ronu le se cinmo mi pagre gi'e cliva .ijebo ba'oku ronu ri cliva mi .ai cu carnygau le nenri kanla pe'a tezu'e lonu zgana le ra terli'a .ibo vi le se pagre be le kamterpa no na'ebo mi ba stali


old version:

.eisai mi na terpa .i lo kamterpa cu menli catra .i lo kamterpa cu

dunli le cmalu puvmrobi'o poi rinka leza'i mulno kamdaspo .i mi ba

catlu le mi kamterpa .i mi ba curmi lenu ri mi pagre gi'e cliva

.ije ca leza'i ri ba'o cliva kei mi ba jai carna fai le nenri kanla

mu'i lenu viska le ra terli'a .i vi lenu le kamterpa puba'o pagre

kei noda ba zasti .i mi po'o ba stali


English

I must not fear. Fear is the mind-killer. Fear is the little-death

that brings total obliteration. I will face my fear. I will permit

it to pass over me and through me. And when it has gone past I

will turn the inner eye to see its path. Where the fear has gone

there will be nothing. Only I will remain.


Comments:

  • ei mi bilga le za'i na terpa
    • That seems to say that I should be obliged to not fear, that I feel an obligation to be obliged. I would either remove ei or remove bilga. The double obligation is not wrong, but it doesn't quite fit the English. I find ei mi na terpa much more compelling. --xorxes
  • e'a mi ba curmi le nu ri mi pagre gi'e darkla
    • Same thing here. It seems to say that I allow myself that I will allow it to pass. Again, a plain e'a ri mi pagre gi'e darkla is more forceful. --xorxes
      • I changed the bilga one to use just the .ei. However on the curmi one it seems better to leave in the curmi so the ba can stay, and drop the e'a.--jrd
  • po'o mi ba stali
    • It should be mi po'o, otherwise po'o modifies the whole sentence and it says something like "the only thing that happens is that I will remain". --xorxes